帮忙改一篇英语作文我英语很烂,请大家帮忙指出语法错误、用词不当之处,最好能讲一讲怎么改比较好 It is very lucky for me to pass the test.But I am still happy that I passed it.Now I have more time doing something

帮忙改一篇英语作文我英语很烂,请大家帮忙指出语法错误、用词不当之处,最好能讲一讲怎么改比较好 It is very lucky for me to pass the test.But I am still happy that I passed it.Now I have more time doing something
帮忙改一篇英语作文
我英语很烂,请大家帮忙指出语法错误、用词不当之处,最好能讲一讲怎么改比较好
It is very lucky for me to pass the test.But I am still happy that I passed it.Now I have more time doing something I love to do.I made a goal for myself.I hope I can achieve it before Septermber.
Yesterday my teacher asked me to make a PPT to introduce why my grade improved so quickly.When I was talking,i was very nervous because I hardly ever talk to so many people.Suddenly,I saw Tina was staring at me with a encouraged smile.I had confidence to myself.I finished the introdution and won a burst of applause.
After the talk,I thanked Tina and we became friends as well.

帮忙改一篇英语作文我英语很烂,请大家帮忙指出语法错误、用词不当之处,最好能讲一讲怎么改比较好 It is very lucky for me to pass the test.But I am still happy that I passed it.Now I have more time doing something
.Now I have more time doing something I love to do.应改为.Now I have more time to do something I love .
before Septermber应该为by Septermber
其实encouraged也可以 不过改成hortative更好
I hardly ever talk to so many people.应改为 I have not ever talk to so many people.
I had confidence to myself.应该为 I built confidence.
其实错不多 就是句子太普通
比如第一句就可以变为Very lucky to pass the exam
要多用美句

第一句到第二句之间用转折关系有点奇怪，在第四句myself之后标点改成分号。第二段第一句Introduce后面加个that变成从句

doing-to do
made-make
encouraged-encouraging
望采纳。

不需要改，不错

It is very lucky for me to pass the test.But I am still happy that I passed it改为
To my surprise that i have passed this test,which makes me very happy.
i was very nervous because I hardly ever...

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It is very lucky for me to pass the test.But I am still happy that I passed it改为
To my surprise that i have passed this test,which makes me very happy.
i was very nervous because I hardly ever talk to so many people改为
it's my first time to talk ahead a lot of people,so i felt nervous when i heard this
when i was talking, i saw Tina was looking at me and this gave much encouragement.

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